Friday, September 5, 2008

TITLE: Whilom Promise

FADE IN:
Play Theme song above Song for Jesse^_^_^_^
               INT. MISS BENNIT'S HOUSE -- DAY

               The crowd is squeezed into the living room chatting with 
               each other, not caring or paying no attention to the          closed, flowerless casket in the middle of the room.

                                     MAN 1
                         She has no family left

                                     WOMEN 1
                         No one has even been in this house 
                         for the last ten years, mostly 
                         people came to see inside her house

               NEIL sits with JAYDEN.  The room goes quiet slowly as an 
               old man stands beside the casket looking down on it.  Neil 
               and Jayden witness through the crowd the man place a red 
               rose on top of the casket.  People are silent with 
               curiosity, but before anyone builds the courage to ask the 
               man a questions he exits.

               EXT. MISS BENNIT'S BACKYARD -- AFTERNOON

               Jayden sways on a old swing as Neil approaches.

                                     JAYDEN
                         Who do you suppose that man was?

                                     NEIL
                         Everyone there we all knew, towns 
                         folk wanting a reason to socialize, 
                         but I never seen him before.

                                     JAYDEN
                         You think he knew her from before, 
                         before her gardens turned gray, when 
                         she was young like us?

                                     NEIL
                         I suppose he could be any number of 
                         people

                                     JAYDEN
                         But the way he looked at her 
                         casket, he saw deeper then the wood 
                         she laid in, he seemed to see a life 
                         now withered away that his heart 
                         missed as much as his memories.

               Neil moves from behind the swing to sitting in front of her.

                                     NEIL
                         You find it romantic asking the 
                         questions only your imagination can 
                         answer?

                                     JAYDEN
                         I find a distant lover who never 
                         stopped loving romantic. I wonder if 
                         anyone will place a rose on my 
                         grave.  Will you?

                                     NEIL
                         You think you will die before me?

                                     JAYDEN
                         We've been friends for so long now, I 
                         picture you being at my funeral.

                                     NEIL
                         Well I want to see you before you 
                         die.  How about this, I will give 
                         you a rose before you die, when your 
                         ill I will stay by your side, you 
                         wont die alone.

                                     JAYDEN
                         You promise?

                                     NEIL
                         I promise

               INT. JAYDEN'S APARTMENT -- NIGHT

               Neil walks slowly through the hall following her. 

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               Neil close to Jayden's face.

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               Jayden standing close to Neil in the doorway

                                                                    CUT TO:

               Jayden placing her hand on Neil's face

                                                                    CUT TO:

               Them laughing on the couch.

                                                                  FADE OUT:

               Jayden kisses Neil

                                                                  FADE OUT:
recommend song: Song For Bob

               EXT. WEDDING -- AFTERNOON

               Jayden stands next to her GROOM on an overcast day.  Neil 
               walks up to the newly weds.

                                     NEIL
                         congratulations

               He first shakes the groom's hand

                                     GROOM
                         You're friend of Jayden's?

                                     NEIL
                         I go way back with Jayden

               Jayden gives him a disappointing look.  Neil pauses, 
               looking her in the eyes.

                                     JAYDEN'S MOM
                         Neil!  We have not seen you in 
                         years!

               Jayden looks off to her side breathing heavily as her MOM 
               puts her arm around him and drags him off to introduce             him to family.  Jayden excuses herself.

                                     JAYDEN  (off screen)
                         That was the last time I saw Neil

                                                                    CUT TO:
If you really want to get into it go to song: Song for Bob 3:30ish min into song

               INT. JADYN'S BED -- NIGHT

               Jayden, now an old women, lies with her DAUGHTER next to her

                                     JAYDEN (con't from off screen)
                         I thought about writing him after 
                         your father and I's divorce

                                     DAUGHTER
                         First loves always stay with you

                                     JAYDEN
                         I think that young girl inside 
                         still dreams he will keep his promise

                                     DAUGHTER
                         Mom

                                     JAYDEN
                         I imagine I'm still hanging in 
                         there for him to come, I don't want 
                         to die without that rose.

                                     DAUGHTER
                         Mom those promises had their 
                         purposes at that time.  People 
                         change.

                                     JAYDEN
                         I suppose with love so young your 
                         heart grows into a mold, and you 
                         carry that mantel with you forever

               Jayden stares out the window at the beads of water falling 
               on the window glass.

                                     JAYDEN (CONT'D)
                         I suppose he could be dead for all 
                         I know.  But still I'm waiting.

               INT. JAYDN'S BED -- LATER

               Jayden falls a sleep.  The candle next to her blows out.

               INT. MISS JAYDEN'S HOUSE -- DAY

               All around are family members, and friends. A casket decorated by flowers sits center room.

               ANGLE ON EXTREME-CLOSE UP

               An aged hand places a rose on the top of the wood casket.

                                                                  FADE OUT:

                                           END 

7 comments:

Amber Joy said...

Brandon, I could barely read the end through all my tears. Now I'm sobbing...I think that pretty much sums up what I thought of it.

Melody and Nathan Pellegrin said...

What a sweet story...the music was perfect...

Debbie Blair said...

Dad says: "Well done". Summer says: "so when are you going to film it?" Mom says: "I could picture it well with the music in the background."

Serinster dot net said...

that was awesome! i love reading stories to songs. those were really pretty songs too! thats such good entertainment. you should do another! i love you brandon and i miss your creative example!

Heather Lytle said...

That was excellent. The music was touching. You have a great talent for writing.

Julie and Tyson said...

That was awesome! I am so happy that you have a blog now and that you post your "visions." Keep it up, I am definitely a fan! :)

Logan said...

good work Brandon. The music went really well with everything. Cant wait to see the cinimatography.

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