Saturday, September 20, 2008
Friday, September 5, 2008
TITLE: Whilom Promise
FADE IN:
Play Theme song above Song for Jesse^_^_^_^
INT. MISS BENNIT'S HOUSE -- DAY
The crowd is squeezed into the living room chatting with
each other, not caring or paying no attention to the closed, flowerless casket in the middle of the room.
MAN 1
She has no family left
WOMEN 1
No one has even been in this house
for the last ten years, mostly
people came to see inside her house
NEIL sits with JAYDEN. The room goes quiet slowly as an
old man stands beside the casket looking down on it. Neil
and Jayden witness through the crowd the man place a red
rose on top of the casket. People are silent with
curiosity, but before anyone builds the courage to ask the
man a questions he exits.
EXT. MISS BENNIT'S BACKYARD -- AFTERNOON
Jayden sways on a old swing as Neil approaches.
JAYDEN
Who do you suppose that man was?
NEIL
Everyone there we all knew, towns
folk wanting a reason to socialize,
but I never seen him before.
JAYDEN
You think he knew her from before,
before her gardens turned gray, when
she was young like us?
NEIL
I suppose he could be any number of
people
JAYDEN
But the way he looked at her
casket, he saw deeper then the wood
she laid in, he seemed to see a life
now withered away that his heart
missed as much as his memories.
Neil moves from behind the swing to sitting in front of her.
NEIL
You find it romantic asking the
questions only your imagination can
answer?
JAYDEN
I find a distant lover who never
stopped loving romantic. I wonder if
anyone will place a rose on my
grave. Will you?
NEIL
You think you will die before me?
JAYDEN
We've been friends for so long now, I
picture you being at my funeral.
NEIL
Well I want to see you before you
die. How about this, I will give
you a rose before you die, when your
ill I will stay by your side, you
wont die alone.
JAYDEN
You promise?
NEIL
I promise
INT. JAYDEN'S APARTMENT -- NIGHT
Neil walks slowly through the hall following her.
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Neil close to Jayden's face.
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Jayden standing close to Neil in the doorway
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Jayden placing her hand on Neil's face
CUT TO:
Them laughing on the couch.
FADE OUT:
Jayden kisses Neil
FADE OUT:
recommend song: Song For Bob
EXT. WEDDING -- AFTERNOON
Jayden stands next to her GROOM on an overcast day. Neil
walks up to the newly weds.
NEIL
congratulations
He first shakes the groom's hand
GROOM
You're friend of Jayden's?
NEIL
I go way back with Jayden
Jayden gives him a disappointing look. Neil pauses,
looking her in the eyes.
JAYDEN'S MOM
Neil! We have not seen you in
years!
Jayden looks off to her side breathing heavily as her MOM
puts her arm around him and drags him off to introduce him to family. Jayden excuses herself.
JAYDEN (off screen)
That was the last time I saw Neil
CUT TO:
If you really want to get into it go to song: Song for Bob 3:30ish min into song
INT. JADYN'S BED -- NIGHT
Jayden, now an old women, lies with her DAUGHTER next to her
JAYDEN (con't from off screen)
I thought about writing him after
your father and I's divorce
DAUGHTER
First loves always stay with you
JAYDEN
I think that young girl inside
still dreams he will keep his promise
DAUGHTER
Mom
JAYDEN
I imagine I'm still hanging in
there for him to come, I don't want
to die without that rose.
DAUGHTER
Mom those promises had their
purposes at that time. People
change.
JAYDEN
I suppose with love so young your
heart grows into a mold, and you
carry that mantel with you forever
Jayden stares out the window at the beads of water falling
on the window glass.
JAYDEN (CONT'D)
I suppose he could be dead for all
I know. But still I'm waiting.
INT. JAYDN'S BED -- LATER
Jayden falls a sleep. The candle next to her blows out.
INT. MISS JAYDEN'S HOUSE -- DAY
All around are family members, and friends. A casket decorated by flowers sits center room.
ANGLE ON EXTREME-CLOSE UP
An aged hand places a rose on the top of the wood casket.
FADE OUT:
END
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